When the fish in the sea
Started looking at me
At first I knew
Not what to do
Should I flipper away
Or make new friends and stay
The look in his
Eye was the clue
His locked gaze was so strong
It did not take me long
To turn away
Quick on my feet
If I had stayed to play
He would lead me astray
And I knew I’d
Become his fresh meat
I liked all three of your poems, but this one was my favorite. The shorter paragraph structure and rhyme scheme help it to flow smoothly. I also enjoyed the somewhat comical nature of the poem.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was fantastic! I love love love it! My favorite part was "He would lead me astray and I knew I'd become his fresh meat." Boys are just so typical :) keep up the good work!!!
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I loved this poem because it was fun and easy to read. The line "turn away quick on my feet" in the second stanza might can be changed a little bit to sound more like he/she is swimming. When I read that line I thought of running more than swimming. Just a thought! This poem is super cute!
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